"Ain't nothing a little sunlight can't fix!" Words from Sunny Duncan a young super powered teenager living on the picturesque island of El Lugar. But no paradise is without its troubles and after an act of kindness, puts her in the crosshairs of a dangerous cartel known only as "La Cima." Its up to Sunny and her newfound powers to takedown this threat before she's backed into a corner. Will Sunny have her chance to shine or has the sun already been set?
Sunrising
Sunrising
edenmalinda @edenmalinda
I can see the style you were going for but it just doesn't work. You are missing so many apostrophes, you have repeating words that should have been dealt with by your proof readers and it is overall sloppy work. Please, have your work proofread before you post anything more. Also, an anthalogy is a story that's parts aren't connected to each other with more then theme. Like Black Mirror or Outher Limits or Inside Number Nine. From what I know, these chapters will be connected, so you mislabeled there.
exousia8800 @exousia8800
A good start, even with the minor grammatical errors. I'm interested to see where this goes, and particularly interested in how you handle the coming difficulties Sunny is likely to face.
Neiyruu @ohreigna
wonderful to see the little Day Star begin to rise. looking forward to seeing more of whats to come for the little fledgling fighter. minor grammatical stuff didnt pull me from the story. practice makes better and you are on a good path <3